Day 5 : Homework Revising Intro of Diagnostic Essay

Day 5 : Homework Revising Intro of Diagnostic Essay

So far, we have covered thesis statements and introductions.

You can refer to PPT files for your review and consolidation.

Click on the link if you need them!

    Thesis Statement and Parallelism

    Introductions and Hooks



Now it is time to revise your diagnostic essay to make it BETTER!


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As you work on revising your diagnostics,
start with your introduction and thesis statement.

For your convenience, 

please click on the following link to download the homework format.

HOMEWORK Format : Revised_intro_diagnostic



Copy the first draft of your introduction into Microsoft Word. 
Save it as “Revised_intro_diagnostic_YOURNAME.doc”
Underline/Highlight your thesis statement.
Tell me what kind of introduction you gave. (Story, statistic, compare and contrast)




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Please answer those questions.


1. What is good about your introduction?


2. What needs to be changed? How can you improve it? (50 words)


3. Regarding your thesis statement, what is your contract with the reader? What is your claim? "My claim is _____. I will demonstrate this by showing/explaining _________."

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Remember, in “revised intro of your diagnostic”, underline your new thesis statement.

Upload your file to the Dropbox folder by Sep. 9th, 11:59PM, Sunday.